On Parade

Commenting on my last post, Alan Summers, aka haikutec, suggested the verse might work well as a one-liner, or monoku. This type of verse isn’t easy to execute, but here are two more that may work better all on one line. What do you think?

old soldiers on parade one-way street

hushed library the clamor of characters calling me

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